⋅ 4 November 2011

The Onomatopoeia Tornado (Concrete Poem)

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Hold on to your head head hold on to hell-p duck in the
...doorway No NOT quack quack duck, kids duck down
......in the door way! meeOW meeOW WoooooOOF
.......WooooooOOf Patch stay! I'll hold your cc collar
........meeOW....I'm coming Fluff! STOP scratching
............your claws! STOP I said look!!! The tree
..............it's cc coming CRASH CRASHing glass
...............window HELL-P my God can you see
.................bulls outside bellow bellow? th th
..................thunder run with cows all of you
.....................Mooooo Mooooo Pleeeeease
......................move cows go Buttercup go
............................keep with the cattle
.............................it's a whorled dust
..............................devil ROARing as
.................................a freight train
...................................Ooooooooo
.......................................but it's
.......................................turned
........................................really
.......................................turned
.........................................gone
.........................................phew
..........................................sob
.........................................blue
.........................................light
.........................................safe
........................................thank
.........................................God!
.........................................sniff
...........................................we
...........................................are
..........................................safe!






Karin Anderson © 2011
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Published Sketchbook
May/June issue 2011

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  • this is wonderful Karin:) made me smile. 4 Nov 2011 by

  • Great read Karin and the tornado like construction and words add to the poem's urgency.. 4 Nov 2011 by

  • ahhh..enjoyed reading this, Karin..It made me smile!! 4 Nov 2011 by

  • Clever, imaginative illustration of Onomatopoeia poetry, Karin...enjoyed 4 Nov 2011 by

  • Original and refreshing to read... much enjoyed! 4 Nov 2011 by

  • Karin, brilliant ! Thought it was going to be serious, but you brought a smile to my face. Very well crafted..Maggie x 4 Nov 2011 by

  • You have drawn tornado picture in poem! Nice effort! 4 Nov 2011 by

  • Karin you are really the "Cat's Meow!" and sooooo dog-gone clever...what a beautiful tornado of a poemmmmmmmmmmmm! The form is Priceless.... I would like to enroll in yoour next class! Dorothy A Poet Who Loves To Sing 4 Nov 2011 by

  • A turbulent creation! 5 Nov 2011 by

  • Fascinating poem, Karin... I'm smiling and enjoying your wonderful creativity very much... Great format to play with :) 5 Nov 2011 by

  • wow Karin, only you could capture the tornado in poetry so perfectly... much much enjoyed this delightful uplifting write. thank you. :) 5 Nov 2011 by

  • Only you can write such a creative verse Karin.I Love the theme,love the shape and I love every single line from this tornado of a creation.Simply brilliant! I am in awe. 5 Nov 2011 by

  • I agree with Susan....extraordinary poetry Karin.... 7 Nov 2011 by

  • Woww, this one is different. I loved the auditory images and format you used in this poem. Loved the uplifting rhythm, this one really fixed my mode. Yes, only you could have written something like this.12 Nov 2011 by

  • Great penning of a unique theme that stimulated not only my brain but ears and eyes as well. Love the excellent structure and the shape that your words in this "onomatopoeia tornado" have created - that of a wine goblet! Exemplary work, Karin.12 Nov 2011 by

  • What a whirlwind of a poem could see the cows and bulls floating by with a very original idea could see it and feel it...great work again...regards13 Nov 2011 by

  • Karin you always surprise your readers with something new and amazing. thanks18 Nov 2011 by

  • Wow! This poetic tornado took my breath away as I read, Karin. Soooooo creatively inked and complimented by your excellent choice of Artwork! A stunning write, which I have so enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing, Karin. God bless you always.....21 Nov 2011 by

  • Oh my God, Karin, the tornado of images, alliteration, auditory stimulation, so many things and creatures demanding time and attention, you have really captured what sometimes a chaotic day can be like. And the ending- well all is well that ends well. Impressive, delightful, full of tension and of course release in the end with a sigh of relief! the form, structure and the image you have chosen completely in sync with the theme.23 Nov 2011 by

  • Marvelously poignant, this made my heart begin to race! La, how in the world can mere words...?? Superb! What a tribute to the horror of a twister, not to mention, in its shape! The excellent magery evoked terror, affection, victimization, deliverance, relief. Fantastic!30 Nov 2011 by

  • Well this is for sure the best example of a Concrete and Onomatopoeia Poem all rolled into one ....... "Ker-Ching" Give this girl de Money !!! Philip21 Apr 2012 by

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