Today I got your ring, babe. So beautiful as could be.
So overjoyed I am, babe. You said you’ll marry me.
Can’t breathe without you, babe. It’s you who gives me life.
We’ll spend life together, babe. I’ll kiss and hold you tight.
I love you so much, babe. You know this much is true.
Each minute of each hour, babe. I’m thinking of only you.
That fateful night you left, babe. Didn’t know I’d face this sorrow.
We kiss each other goodnight, babe. I shall see you tomorrow.
Car stalled on the tracks, babe. Though they blew the horn.
The train hit you there, babe. Now I’m sad and all alone.
They said they found your ring, babe. You held on it so tight.
They showed me the ring, babe. Passed out from the very sight.
They buried you today, babe. I don’t know what to do.
Will never love another, babe. Not after loving you.
Can’t keep on living, babe. Can’t do this by myself.
I miss you so much, babe. So desperately need help.
I put a gun to my head, babe. My life is now through.
They buried me today, babe. They buried me next to you.
This tugs at the emotions, so hard!
Brilliant storytelling, here.
Thank you bro. Tried the “babe” style with just two verses but decided to do the whole poem like that after editing. It came out better than I thought. I appreciate your support and pushing me as well.
What a rollercoaster ride of emotions, man! The narrative, the emotional beats – just all of it! I’m beyond impressed! Thank you for sharing another powerful write!
Thank you! First time I wrote this I thought it was weak but had so much feedback from people crying. It blew me away considering I was going to be put on this piece on back burner and forgotten. Thank you for everything CY! Means a lot!
That last line knocks the very breath out of me! Starts so bright than sucker punches you in the gut!
That was the goal for this poem. Thank you for reading and commenting. Much appreciation!