When he looks up, he sees no lights,
Just a ceiling life painted black.
A makeshift sky at lower heights,
It’s breathtaking and breath he lacks.
The city hates him or maybe
It’s a matter of point of view;
Walking the streets unwillingly,
Unaware of who’s raping who.
He makes zero sense of this quest
Seeking for what he hasn’t lost,
And cheated no one but himself
Thus took the blame and paid the cost.
Boy you’re clueless, oh boy you’re bold,
Feeling a guilt you don’t deserve.
After three steps you left the hold,
And gave up what’s left of your verve.
Burn your phone and depart for good,
Do it in the blink of an I ;
Unmake your mind just like you would
Come back in the blink of two eyes.
Tank ain’t empty but sure ain’t full,
Shed blood, shed tears and pour some sweat;
Body’s crying from every hole,
Craving a truth you’ll never get.
Dull melody made of wrong notes,
Unheard before disappearing;
And thoughts shorten, sentences not,
I ain’t trying and done praying…
When I look up, I see no lights,
just a ceiling life painted black;
A makeshift sky at lower heights
It’s breathtaking and breath I lack.
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man, the parts I relate to are too many to mention.. “burn your phone and depart for good” was special among those, though… and again, you make the most f-ed up things sound great, like “Dull melody made of wrong notes”.. this is you, this is the kind of thing you write, recognizable, but also surprising in ways.. I think I’ve already said a lot about your work tho.. & I think you know how great it is 🙂
I know nothing 😂 Thanks for the comment, I felt like putting something out but like you I wasn’t satisfied. Then I thought I should practice what I preach.
Anyway, thanks my Friend.
What’s there not to be liked? :O
Too many great lines to quote, but this one left me breathless
“It’s breathtaking and breath he lacks.”
Thanks for reading Lumière, your comments are always appreciated.
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I read this one out loud to myself… Superb rhyming and wordplay, I liked the structure as well. Brilliant work, thanks for sharing!
Thank you Destiny, I’m looking forward to reading your work.
yes, what they said
Thank you Greg, far too kind 🙂
Love thisssss!
Thank you for reading Dezhra!
It was my pleasure! Also, I just wanted to point out the fact that I love how you structured the poem, and changed the color of the words – I don’t know how you did that, but it made the poem so much fun to read lol 🙂
Love the story with the superb rhyming skill. You’ve weaved together a great poem. Well done!
OH thank you Jarid, always nice hearing from you!
“It’s breathtaking and breath I lack.”
This line is brilliant.
Great piece, overall.
Thank you Rome, I hope you’re holding on