For what seems an unending while
I’ve been lost somewhere in the wild
A sudden rush into the familiar
Yet holds the trouble of a desert isle
Have I not, all these nights
Been tryin’ to say it’s worth the while
To watch the shadows drift away
While new ones ran to see you smile
& I still wonder, though in pain
If all of life was but a trial
Sometimes I think of who we are
A sea that swallowed every star
A light that followed not too far
A reverie with film grain
Two hearts trapped in a jar
Sometimes I believe I can’t hide
I’d watch us flourish beyond time
sometimes I fall & fear to stand
& then I learn that I’d die tryin’
To watch my old shadows decay
& I’d know where to draw the line
but I never knew what’s right to say
which words in silence find their place
which ones, confined, you found in me
that told you to confide in me
I never knew, might never do
What words I hid have done to you
…& those that came to fill your ears
That twisted your shine into tears
That twisted me, from sparks of hope
Into a source of creeping fears
Which ones are right not to be said
That leave, like warmth, an empty bed?
Which ones are right to say tonight
To a life I’ve given up without a fight
NB
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Wow! you magician of words, you who plays the cords of the heart in such exquisite form.
In reality, my words fall short.
thank u so much 🙂 i guess i just write what i feel and pick from the thoughts that actually matter or just make sense…
and you do it so well ⭐️
you have a masterful understanding of literature, a powerful artistic integrity. this was one of my favorite reads on here, great job NB, keep delivering fantastic content!
thank u so much for the support.. and i do hope i will 🙂
Damn, son!
This is such a relatable piece of writing.
It felt so familiar, for something I didn’t pen
The flow, the rhyme scheme, the message..
You nailed this one! 💯
And this stanza tells a story all by itself:
“Have I not, all these nights
Been tryin’ to say it’s worth the while
To watch the shadows drift away
While new ones ran to see you smile
& I still wonder, though in pain
If all of life was but a trial”
Brilliant!
thanks brother… just trying to get back on my feet again 🙂 i know it isn’t the most active site but there’s enough familiar people that always leave meaningful feedback so i’ll probably keep hanging around here.. thanks for the review 🙂
I’d also like to point out that the last long stanza (“but i never knew whats right to say”) was largely inspired by your writing style 🙂
M’guy!
I love hearing that.
Especially since reading this inspired me to write my next one. 💯
Looking forward to reading it 🙂
Great piece.