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Almost There (Purgatory’s Revolving Door)

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He didn’t hear the shot comin’
Before he knew it, his heart managed to stop runnin’
Another free soul, like a pedal that dances in the wind
Mid-twenties type and with metal piercin’ his windpipe

 

This soul is turnin’ its head,
it doesn’t realize it

It sees a man on the floor
but doesn’t recognize him


That man was him;
and no one is missin’ him

It’s evident – vacant lot,
body leaks the crimson evidence

 

The lights flicker around him,
the hands of time are frozen

And in the distance it’s clear
that certain words are spoken (…stay)

 

It must be heaven!
His grandparents, old buddy Evan,
Even an uncle he lost way back in ’97

 

Beautiful angels appear
And whisper in his ear,
“Blessed child, your soul will rest here.”
They’re lightly guidin’ his hand
Towards his uncle
Smile on his face, they tell him,


“Almost there.”


He tries to grab him.

*GASP*
He thought he had him.
*GASP*
But in an instant-
*GASP*
He’s gettin’ distant.
*GASP* (…..th… m.)

 

He’s gettin’ dragged
To the fiery depths of the underworld
Lost souls cry out in agony
At the crash of thunder

 

Lucifer’s agents appear
And screamin’ in his ear,
“Putrid lamb, your soul will suffer here!”
And with it, piercin’ his skin,
Makin’ him face
The very sins he committed!

 

“ALMOST THERE!!”


They’re wreaking havoc

*GASP* (….ith…m.)
Won’t let ’em have it
*GASP* (s..y..h…)
But in an instant-
*GASP*
He’s gainin’ distance
*GASP* (Sta..th… m.)

 

Feedin’ his soul à la carte
A tortured fresh start to life after death?
But just then, the beatin’ of his heart…

 

Listen…

(Stay..h..me)

(Stay…wit…e)

“Stay With Me!”

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14 Comments

  1. I wish I could read this for the first time once again.. but nevertheless, it’s always got its own magic.. I know it sounds weird, but I think this might be one of the missing elements for the story I’m working on, so I might grab a little inspiration here & there.. as always 🙂 you rock, dude, what else can I say?

    • Much appreciated, my friend! Feel free to grab whatever inspiration you need 🙂 I’m humbled to contribute in any way I can. Thanks for reading!

  2. Illustrates the battle of good and evil and that everyone has both. Good narrative and rhyming.

    • Much appreciated, my friend. So glad that you took the time to check it out. Thank you so much!

  3. Hungri_Hungri_Hippa

    “GASP” You are still one of the best. Secret Agent Cyrus, Cyrus the Virus (if you’ve ever watched ConAir) 😀 I still love your poems. 🙂

    • So glad to see you on here, my friend. Thank you for your truly kind words! I haven’t watched Con Air in a while but I vaguely recall the reference ^_^

  4. AMAZING!

    I’ve been pondering a thought, For a couple of days.
    This relates well (in a roundabout way).

    “The lights flicker around him,
    the hands of time are frozen
    And in the distance it’s clear
    that certain words are spoken (…stay)”

    LOVE IT..

    • Awesome bro I thank you so much for the review 🙂 the demons that pursue us should definitely be afraid of how good we can truly be. Appreciate you!

  5. I love this because it makes me want to know more! Like why was he shot and what happens next, I get quite excited when a poem makes me think like that! Absolutely amazing, x

    • Haha well thank you kindly for checking this piece out 🙂 I’m a fan of throwing the reader right in the thick of things – helps with pacing and intrigue ^_^ You’re awesome.

  6. midnightrain

    Oooh love the structure and imagery, my friend. The true torture was being so close to the angelic voice and at the last second he is dragged back. Also, love the way it reads, the details you add are never too much or too little. Just perfect. So glad to have read this *GASP* 🙂

    • haha Aww. You’re the best 🙂 That gut punch at the end had to be there in order to give it an effective resolution. Thanks for reading, my friend 🙂

  7. You’re the only one able to write at this level. Your skills in storytelling have no match out there. I thoroughly enjoyed the read.

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