I saw you breathe life into me
As even death himself
Was getting old
Like a crippled dragon
Against a sun to-be-reborn
I saw the veil with which he covered
The briefly breathing world
Predestined for returning
Far to the other side
Of a recurring chapter
Moving through the Infinite
In forms that change
Any way the wind blows
We were just like them
Made of water & dreams
Made of highs & lows
With an appetite for clarity
& an untamed desire
To hide, to mystify
We were climbing highest floors
Remote perspectives
of an ever changing night sky
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“Moving through the Infinite
In forms that change
Any way the wind blows”
Sounds like a day in my head.. 😂😂
Another gem, my friend!
I just realized I left some parts sort of unfinished xD it’s good to know you like it.. thanks 🙂
Great comparison of people with clouds. Nicely worded, a good poem.
thank you 🙂
excellent.
thank you (:
“I saw you breathe life into me
As even death himself
Was getting old
Like a crippled dragon
Against a sun to-be-reborn”
You reeled me in from the first stanza. This is so beautifully written. I’m a sucker for those romantic details. I feel that sometimes that it’s not the entire poem that catches your attention, it’s those small details embellished throughout the poem that really gets you. Or maybe that’s just me 🙂 Whatever it is, it’s wonderful that you possess such talent.
haha I know what you mean.. the details worked better lately since I’ve been writing pretty weird stuff xD thanks so much 🙂
Correction- pretty amazing stuff!
<3
Okay but how though? How do you never cease to amaze despite all the time that I’ve been reading your work? Again, that idea of the dreamscape artist comes into play here, giving us a truly elegant write that can be considered among your most masterful pieces so far. I just can’t with you 😛 Brilliance.
it’s a secret, man.. & I know nothing about it xD
just doing my best i guess.. but i’ve got something better i’m working on.. thanks for the continued support 🙂
There are no emotions that you can’t master in your poems Nebojsa! Joy, sorrow etc. Reading this was like moving through the stars and indeed the joy was contagious!
i wish there was a way to describe everything i’ve felt & seen at that moment.. but this way is more interesting, i believe.. thank you 🙂
Good stuff NB! 🙂
Dark clouds as a relief
to the wars and fights of men
unrelenting twas the grief
The sorrows great
from places now
and then
you’ve always got something awesome.. thanks for reading 🙂
It just feels so effortless.. and that makes it so beautiful and tranquil, and absolutely remakable..
“We were just like them
Made of water & dreams
Made of highs & lows”
This write is studded with so many amazing lines and this stanza is amongst them. Just keep writing and bless this world 🙂
every time it feels effortless, i start thinking that something’s missing.. now i’m not sure about this one though.. thank you so much 🙂
I’m sorry if my comment made you doubt it. But no, when I say it feels effortless, I mean that it flows so very intricately, as if this poem already existed somewhere (perhaps the great land of poetry lol) and you just dreamt it. But I mean I can have a similar thought to the one that inspired this poem but I couldn’t articulate that way.. and that’s why it seems effortless..
lol no that came out wrong.. i meant that it made me stop doubting it xD ’cause every time the writing process is too easy, i feel like there’s something more i should’ve done.. but after all these comments, just how can i say it’s not good enough..?
Made of water & dreams
That’s the best formula ever to describe us. I wish I came up with that first.
knew it xD thanks my friend 🙂