I see.
Two hands holding
O’ mainland lovers
Came for the beauty
Stayed for each other
Two small birds play
O’ rocky ground
The songs they sing
Dance in & around
Two waves rolling
O’ Oahu sands
While hills wave
Along on lands
Two palms sit
O’ the end of one hill
Where we’re watching
From a sugarcane field
This is constructed masterfully! The rhymes, the language, the rhythm, all amazing!
Wow I really enjoyed this read. Clearly song lyrics waiting to be mastered and heard. Thank you so much for sharing!
Felt the rhythm in this the whole way.
I enjoyed your word choice.
Nicely penned.